The sun at its best


So many mountains are climbed just because the sun shows its face. A man walks by and the sun follows its arc across the sky. Thats the sun at its best. I was wearing my green helmet as usual. The barista asked and I said my usual. A flat white with oat milk. I wonder if the man noticed the boulder on my back, my backpack, heavy. I saw his, clearly, a briefcase with what looked like a bowling ball, papers bulging out, hurried. I wondered if the world could be more simple than it is.  I had gotten my usual flat white, on the top was a foam heart. I bet it just takes practice. The barista smiles, as if she recognizes me. Why am I still wearing this helmet? My heart continues to beat, just like yesterday at this time, at its best. It bulges and compressions, blood flows, and my breath brings air into my lungs, and every thing goes where it needs to. On to where they are supposed to, on to where they would fall if they were a ball and you threw them as far as you could, or as many times as you could and no matter how hard you threw that ball or how many times it would always go where it should, because sometimes that just how things are and will be and always be. And many mountains are climbed, and many mountains aren't. Thats you at its best.




it feels a bit Kerouakcy but more mysterious 
2022-01-18 19:00:54
The beginning idea of splendid mountain face being the sun at it's best was a creative take that intrigued me.

I'd like to see that connected to something more human by the middle/end. I think you were almost onto something but it didn't quite hit.

What is one when they're at their best? In a similar vein to the mountain face?

Isn't it some type of legacy they leave behind through other people? Perhaps an inspiring conversation amongst mutual friends that leads to further relationships? Perhaps a well built bench that you placed somewhere that in a moment provides an older couple respite from a long climb up the hill.
2022-01-19 13:55:59
It was supposed to be similar to. The story of the myth of sisyphus,Or thats the idea. But not sad so and tortuous just was. Started off as a poem, but then thought a vignette better. Yeah idk what I was thinking what was it at its best or humans. I was more thinking that we don't expect much out of the sun, its always rising east and then west. Same with sisyphus. I like the idea of the bench though, Bill is doing that now. 

I also agree I had a train of thought and feeling, but lost it towards the end. Ah well, maybe a rewrite and expansion in the future. 
2022-01-19 15:42:14