There were no specific examples in the form of sentences of the first two. There were specific attributes however.

I believe the thing you are trying to deliberately avoid -- keeping the reader in the dark chasing you -- was one thing that made the first two more theatrical. Just the right mix of details and meaningful action ( 

George Saunders

likes meaningful action vs the word plot lol ).

I think that because you were following

William Gibson

to a tee you got that for free. Kind of like getting a ton of things for free when following the conventions of an

MVC

webapp via 

Ruby on Rails

or 

Laravel

.

I think these last two assignments reveal how difficult it is to get that blend of details + meaningful action right. I think going forward that would be a great Daniel thing to hone your craft on, but given that this is the final week of

Echo and Narcissus

club it's a good opportunity to just do some more Gibson copying.

PS I'm already reading that Saunders' book

Maggie Appleton

mentioned and it is so necessary for fiction writers. You will love it. Please check it out. I hope Maggie does end up organizing a club around it!

Reading this and

Coming to America - Scott Adams Remix Keni

  gives me a thrill similar to that which came from discovering

MVC

frameworks. I remember feeling for the first time that I could build the things I was using. I no longer was 

qualitatively

different from the professional 

developers

. Quantitatively? Yes, but I could bridge that gap. There was a bridge that I could take finally. And that bridge was the conventions of MVC.

Reading this I'm super impressed. You were able to craft an engaging scene with real feeling characters. I'm not going to hyperbolize and say that these are characters that I'll dream about and think about on my walks, but who can manage something like that in ~500 words?

This accomplishes exactly what 500 words should. Establish a connection between reader and characters, and have the reader asking for more. And you did it without some voodoo magic, artist way but rather just following a 'braindead' process. Just follow the MVC pattern. Don't over complicate things to microservices. Not for now yet.

Anyways I'm super looking forward to how continuing this 'braindead' process or just following conventions can change the way we write. 

Recently I have come to the realization that even the great stories are not these big huge acrobatic feats but rather a composition of simple and reasonable snippets like the ones you and Keni just created via mimicry. I trust that if mimicry tends to consistent input ability then the creative part where we no longer are actively mimicking another writer will arrive naturally. Even before we know it.